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Post by Vivian Astley on Dec 28, 2004 13:02:57 GMT -5
ahhhhhhhhh
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Post by Jeffrey on Dec 28, 2004 13:03:56 GMT -5
fireworks
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Post by Vivian Astley on Dec 29, 2004 21:28:05 GMT -5
oooooooooooooooooo
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Post by Jeffrey on Dec 30, 2004 0:06:01 GMT -5
pretty
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Post by Jeffrey on Dec 30, 2004 0:37:47 GMT -5
To butt in before things get any more off topic, I've been doing a little snooping around after my post in Dinner and have come to the conclusion that the ending's really awkward. I've been imagining events going a lot different than they've been written time wise. Here's the basic idea that I see in my mind:
Sands rapes Viv Sands runs away Sands shoots Roux (He should wake up someday, shouldn't he?) Sands freaks out. Zack takes over Sands gets pissed Shooter joins the fray They get let out Stuff happens Sands and Shooter disappear Viv finds comfort with Roux (who must have gotten better in time, and I think Zack's recovering from the encounter, but I dunno yet) Zack finds them together Zack storms off, trashes his room, breaks his hand, etc Zack and Viv clean his room. Zack thinks Viv hates him Zack disappear into Dinner thread Zack's angsty because of Sands raping Viv
Somehow... we've gotta get to the point where Zack's pissed off with Viv and disappears. Apparently it happened right after Sands raped her, but that obviously can't happen with all the other stuff going on. That's gotta be fixed.
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Post by Vivian Astley on Dec 30, 2004 14:47:11 GMT -5
yea i think so but that sounds alright to me.
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Post by Jeffrey on Dec 30, 2004 14:58:02 GMT -5
Yeah but why does Zack freak out for no reason after the somewhat pleasant dinner chat? There's a giant gaping hole between Dinner and Freak out.
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Post by Vivian Astley on Dec 30, 2004 15:02:24 GMT -5
we'll fill it in with something
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Post by Jeffrey on Dec 30, 2004 15:06:53 GMT -5
I think Viv's gotta angst. Make Zack sad. She flounces into the TL the next morning. Zack angsts because Viv angsted. I know I've gotta rewrite it, but I've gotta know what to write.
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Post by Vivian Astley on Dec 30, 2004 15:53:04 GMT -5
well soemthing bad must happen.
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Post by Jeffrey on Dec 30, 2004 16:08:35 GMT -5
...yeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeees...
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Post by Vivian Astley on Dec 30, 2004 17:51:20 GMT -5
i take it you have no ideas as well
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Post by Jeffrey on Dec 30, 2004 18:23:07 GMT -5
I had one. Then I forgot it.
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Post by Vivian Astley on Jan 3, 2005 15:54:26 GMT -5
I think you must have found it.
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Post by Jeffrey on Jan 3, 2005 15:56:04 GMT -5
I did, but then I realized it wouldn't work because Sands went away and Zack doesn't know about it.
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